Fair. What is fair? A word meaning not exhibiting any bias, dishonest
and injustice and therefore reasonable or impartial. The question asks
if Melbourne is fair. I believe that Melbourne, a city overpopulated
with sexism, racism, ageism, financial imbalance and much more, will
probably never be fair. However, compared to the rest of the world,
Melbourne is considered pretty fair. Many points contribute to the fact
and the answer may be yes or no, depending on which side you see it.
The Government. Unlike
many other countries, Australia is capitalist. In 2010, we elected our
first female prime minister, Julia Gillard. However, many Melbourne
citizens (and Australian for that matter) decided not to take a liking
to her. The first and foremost thing they insulted her on was her
gender. She was a female, and 'females will never do as well as men'.
Another thing was about the way she dressed. The Daily Telegraph
and many other newpapers fired countless insults at ther clothing, and
one raincoat in particular. Seriously, shouldn't we be judging people on
their policies, and not on how they dress? Another problem is, if you
are a child/ teenager living in Melbourne, you barely have any say. Your
opinions aren't taken seriously and you are often ignored. Everything
mentioned above is definitely unfair. However, there are some countries,
like Saudi Arabia where women have no rights at all. They are not
allowed to drive, vote and go anywhere without male approval, let alone
run a country. Afghanistan's women live up to and average of no further
than 45 due to domestic violence and war. The reason children's
opinions may not be taken too seriously is maybe because they have 'less
experience'. They (we) haven't experienced the world as 'adults' have
and therefore have less knowledge of the world. Luckily for us, unlike
other nations, we have the AYCC: Australian Youth Climate Coalition. The
AYCC is an organisation where 'young adults' can push their beliefs
onto politicians, can question things, can petition, pressure the
government.... On Wednesday, I went on a trail to an AYCC office and the
people who talked to us also agreed that though Melbourne is unfair,
compared to the rest of the world, Melbourne is in one of the top 10
because of the reasons listed before.
The law and the way it is handled. On
Friday, I was fortunate enough to be in a group that was randomly
selected to go to the Magistrates' Court. At the courts, we got to
wander around to different courts designed for different things.
Listening to the case at the last court I visited, I came to the
assumption that Indigenous people had less government support than other
races. However, when I went home to do my own little reasearch, I found
out that Aboriginal people actually received no less (and no more)
government sponsorship. (Link:
http://www.reconciliation.org.au/home/get-involved/learning-tools/mythbusters)
Another 'fairness point' was that in one of the cases where a man being
accused of driving without a license. When asked how many children he
had, the reply was that he had 6, all aged between 3-20 and living with
him. The magistrate was quiet for a moment, then said something along
the lines of, "Obviously, all of your children depend on your income,
which depends on the fact that you need a license. Because of that, you
will only be fined $500 and not have your license taken away. " That was
one of the many things I witnessed that day that made me think, gee,
Melbourne is quite fair. Magistrates give people a chance to defend
themsevles even when it is obvious that they are guilty. They can also
be sympathetic and, of course, fair, unlike those of other countries
such as Syria.
Financial (im)balance/ distribution of wealth. Did
you know that a shocking 10% of household wealth
is owned by the bottom 50% bread-winners? Other than that, Melbourne
also has one of the
highest rates of low-income households out of developed countries! If
divided into ten wealth groups, the three lowest parts of Melbourne earn
no money at all!!! On the bright side, I think every country suffers
from this. In fact, in United States, the richest 1% of Americans get
34.6% of wealth whilst the poorest 40% of the population earns 0.2% of
wealth. Considering that, Melbourne's distribution of wealth is probably
one of the best on the world.
Therefore, yes Melbourne
is unfair. However, isn't it unfair everywhere else? Afghanistan has
87% of its women experiencing domestic violence, many countries are
being dictated in an unfair government and the distribution of wealth
between classes are so far apart. Therefore, whether you are rich or
poor, young or old, male or female, Melbourne will always be unfair, but
in comparison the rest of the world, Melbourne is seen as fair.
http://www.reference.com/motif/society/which-countries-are-ruled-by-a-dictator
http://www.thestar.com/news/world/article/326354--ten-worst-countries-for-women
http://www.reconciliation.org.au/home/get-involved/learning-tools/mythbusters
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wealth_inequality_in_the_United_States
http://www.dailytelegraph.com.au/news/julia-gillards-technicolour-coat-shows-prime-minister-needs-an-allowance/story-e6freuy9-1225888233550
http://www.theblaze.com/stories/reminder-woman-are-not-allowed-to-vote-in-saudi-elections/
Trails
ME :)
Hello,
ReplyDeleteYou're essay's good man. Jeez the amount of info and stats is overwhelming. I like the financial distribution paragraph, didn't think of fairness in financial terms. Again, nothing much to say, just, cos I'm Sarah, the exclamation marks maybe aren't needed in an essay. Dunno, nice work :)
Sarah
Hey,
DeleteThanks for the compliment.... Well, I added the exclamtion marks to make it a little less formal??? Maybe didn't work well though. Thanks :)
Thao-My
Hi Thao-My,
ReplyDeleteAnother well thought-out response. You have considered the issue from various perspectives, compared evidence to other evidence to give it a context and also sought out relevant evidence of your own.
I would like to see you use linking sentences rather than give your paragraphs sub-headings. Sub-headings are appropriate in a report, but not an essay. i also agree with Sarah that one exclamation mark in sufficient and you may not need them at all. Use them sparingly in an essay response.
I was also a little confused by your discussion of the evidence in the financial/distribution of wealth paragraph. You say Melbourne is 'probably' one of the best; avoid 'probably'. look it up or avoid altogether.
Well done Thao-My,
Carly
Coherence of Argument 1 of 1
Use of Evidence 2 of 2
Further Research 1 of 1
Multiple Perspectives 2 of 2
Critical Thinking 0.5 of 1
Expression & Language Use 1 of 1
Structure 1.5 of 2
9/10